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IELTS - DO NOT Write this for Band 9 Task 2, Write this Instead

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An IELTS writing section key strategy video by aehelp.com. The first 1000 people who click the link will get one free month of Skillshare Premium: https://skl.sh/academicenglishhelp08211 This video gives information about common student mistakes in Task 2 of the Academic and General IELTS exams. It also explains what you need to write in order to get a band 7 to 9 on the Writing Section. To get lots more help, join our Premium IELTS course at https://www.aehelp.com/full-course/ The video will help you navigate your studies to get a band 7, 8, and 9 through building the language and communication skills necessary for success on the exam. This series will teach you the skills that will help you to be successful, confident and to reach success on these questions during the speaking interview. Follow the instructions carefully and make sure to practice. This video is sponsored by Skillshare. See a list of conjunctions: https://www.aehelp.com/blog/2020/09/03/ielts-band-9-linking-words-connectives/ Question Many people drive personal vehicles to school and work. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this type of transportation? Discuss both and give your own opinion. Band 6.5 Essay A lot of individuals take their cars to school and business. This essay will discuss the benefits and demerits of this mode of travel, and I will give my own opinion. On the one hand, cars create a lot of traffic and pollution. Since petrol is needed by automobiles for power, they create a lot of smog in order to get the drivers and passengers to their destination. In fact, so much air pollution has been created over the past century by cars that there are now holes in the ozone layer which leads to getting skin cancer and killing flora and fauna. A recent article in the New York Times stated that each year 100 different plants and animals die because of the smog caused by car fumes. Also, there is a lot of heavy traffic in big cities because of many people driving cars. These are clearly disadvantages of using a personal vehicle. On the other hand, there are many advantages to using a car like saving time and being comfortable. Automobiles are very fast compared to walking or even taking the bus. It can take a person one hour to get to work by bus, but only 20 minutes to reach their job when driving their car. Also, it is private, air-conditioned, and they can listen to their choice of music. For these reasons, I prefer to drive my car to work. I enjoy listening to jazz music, and I get to my job in just ten minutes. These are the merits of driving a personal vehicle. In conclusion, many people drive cars to educational institutions and workplaces. There are advantages and disadvantages, but I think the benefits are more. Band 9 Essay Millions of cars take commuters to work and school daily all over the world. Over the past century, automobiles have played a critical role in the modernization of nations, as well as the transformation of infrastructure and the environment. The well-being of current and future generations is dependent on the ways in which society and individuals understand the impact of using personal vehicles for everyday driving. The disadvantages of cars are pollution and traffic; however, they benefit commuters by providing time and comfort. Arguably, much of the air pollution, especially smog in large metropolitan cities, has been created by the constant use of vehicles to move from home to the office and classroom. The ozone layer has thinned and many species of animals and plants have suffered from the soot, a byproduct, created by the burning of fossil fuels used to power cars. A recent research study has discovered that the ozone layer has been depleted by as much as 50% over the past century, and it is unable to recover as a result of carbon emissions. Although these are negatives of using cars, I believe there are solutions to such problems and the benefits of personal vehicles are greater. With the advancement of technology, many vehicles are now electric powered rather than burning petrol. At the same time, using a car saves precious time for commuters to reach their work and school. Furthermore, commuters can feel comfortable in a climate-controlled environment without the distraction of strangers, like on a city bus. This added convenience greatly helps to improve motorists’ quality of life and therefore stay positive and productive throughout the workweek. For these very reasons, I prefer to take my own car to my place of employment. These advantages help to maintain progress and integrity in societies. In conclusion, the debate of using cars for everyday needs is an important one. It is necessary for authorities to discern the negatives of this technology, such as air pollution and traffic, in order to improve on these while maintaining the positives of efficiency and comfort. In the future, both people and nature must be taken into consideration with regard to private vehicle commute.

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    @zebinisoabduhalimova6453منذ 3 سنوات Hello , Teacher
    It would be better if you could show that what kind of linking words should be used in writing task 2 . Instead of ,,on the one hand", ,,on the other hand",.and ect
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    @mabimohebi425منذ 3 سنوات I like how accurate he is teaching us to improve our writing, he is a wonderful teacher 10
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    @happysaini5872منذ 3 سنوات Thank you dear sir for providing this amazing video! 1
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    @oceanman3676منذ 3 سنوات You gave me accurate knowledge for free, I don't know how to thank you enough. 2
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    @stephanestephane4291منذ 3 سنوات thanks for this video
    Where can I find your list of subordinating conjunctions ?
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    @quinnfabray8919منذ 3 سنوات thank u! I'm watching all of your videos and practicing my reading,listening and speaking. however, it's so hard to start writing an essay . I hope I'll fix it as soon as possible ! I have 2 months to pass IELTS ....وسعت 5
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    @mori4281منذ 3 سنوات Thank you so much for this great tip! You are the best!
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    @muhammadalimahkamboyev4166منذ 3 سنوات Thank you so much , all your videos are really helpful, and i get a lot, please make such great and useful videos often
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    @zulfiyafaxriddinova1636منذ 3 سنوات You're the best. Thanks a lot. Keep helping us
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    @saitamasensei6093منذ 3 سنوات I can't thank you enough, sir.
    I have been struggling in getting a high writing mark since middle-school.
    So I thought, going to high-school id="hidden3" class="buttons"> in two weeks, I would have to improve.
    This video makes everything clear, these unrecognizable mistakes had imperceptibly dragged my marks down.
    Even though I have ok grammar, good amount of vocabulary, and a ton of ideas.
    All I lacked was something that would glue them together to make an essay, a structure, a unique style of writing.
    This is what I have been looking for; Some fresh air outside of my box, my comfort zone.
    The essays in the description are great, but I need help analyzing.
    Could you please make a lesson on analyzing essays?
    If you already posted a video please reply the link.
    Thank you in advance.
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    @juiinaaya7841منذ 3 سنوات Very helpful.Thank you very much
    You are the best IELTS teacher I have ever seen.
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    @ieltswritingclass5800منذ 3 سنوات Some good tips here, I've been teaching IELTS for over 10 years and my students have had best results with similar tips.
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    @jasur7397منذ 3 سنوات Thanks a lot. I am really interested in joining your Premium Package. I might become a member soon 1
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    @javlonbektoxirov1661منذ 3 سنوات Yet, we should use Contrast linkers in discussion essay, I think
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    @bangtanismplaysgames7993منذ 3 سنوات hi AEhelp, i wanna ask if you wrote that thesis right in the beginning then will you gonna repeat again in the body paragraph?
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    @saeid9800منذ 3 سنوات Thank you for your informative video. You said we shouldn't use first, second, third, finally in essays, but you didn't say what we should use id="hidden4" class="buttons"> instead. I was waiting to hear something about an alternative method of presentation up to the end of the video. What do you suggest to use instead of first, second, third, and finally? ....وسعت 3
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    @devilaseمنذ 3 سنوات Hi, I love your videos. I'm wondering that can you make some videos about how to get a band 8 in writing, some tips and strategies would help (I'm id="hidden5" class="buttons"> really struggling with writing). Thanks for reading my comment. Wish you the best. ....وسعت
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    @tandungphan1624منذ 3 سنوات Thank you for sharing these tips. I hope you make videos like this rather than making live videos 1
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    @javlonbektoxirov1661منذ 3 سنوات But Simon used "Firstly", "Secondly" and "Finally" many times in his band 9 essays.
    Please, do not get me wrong. I am a bit confused. Therefore, I asked
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    @kirankoyyagura8986منذ 3 سنوات Hi sir , how are you?
    I just want to know whether I can use " by way of conclusion" instead of " in conclusion" . Which is appropriate for high band ?
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    @yogeshsharma-ei1ceمنذ 3 سنوات Hello sir, do you provide writing assessment and feedback facility for students ?
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    @bakchodimattkarlaudeمنذ 3 سنوات Hello !
    Just wanted to ask a question regarding the writing part 2. So point to be, to complete the task 2, I tried to write 'over there' id="hidden8" class="buttons"> at the last minute. But certainly the time went off and maybe I just wrote 'ove' at the end :p How would it impact my results?
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    @quochuy9282منذ 3 سنوات I've read a lot of Simon's essays, some of them used on the one hand, on the other hand, . And he still got a band 9 in writing. Could you elucidate this? I'm so confused.
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    @deliciousrecipes5310منذ 3 سنوات Thankuuu so much sir bcauz I got 6.5 overall by watching some fantastic lessons from urr channel 1
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    @ahmedsiam1528منذ 3 سنوات oh godawful!
    I Didn't get conjunction list in description
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    @ngohuybach1024منذ 3 سنوات Dear Adrian, can u tell me the reason why at home I scored up to 7.5 or 8.0 in Lis but when I did a test at my extra class, I just scored about 6,0 or id="hidden10" class="buttons"> 6.5 and I practiced speaking the whole time and when I did the test, it seemed to me that I didn't improve anything. It's extremely annoying and sometimes I want to give up ....وسعت 1
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    @rajdeepalisha6936منذ 3 سنوات Can we use a particular word more than three times?
    Is it good for high score?
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    @sanigasanthosh1993منذ 3 سنوات Sir I am really confused because a few of the points that you mentioned are what my tutor suggested to do.
    Also is it right to use in my mind instead of for instance.
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    @paramgrover7860منذ 3 سنوات You're vdeoz are very helpful to us.
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    @dayana9502منذ 3 سنوات I can't believe I actually used all the templates shown in this video and thought I'd get a band 8 well I saw this right on time, my ielts is in like. 4 days
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    @connect2satyendraمنذ 3 سنوات "Millions of cars take commuters" or "Millions of commuters take cars" in the introduction? Are these both okay? Also, the Subordinating conjunction materials, please? 5
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    @zhanerkezeilbekova5647منذ 3 سنوات Can u make a video for reading ? Please
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    @reiikarei6673منذ 3 سنوات Thanks for the video! Anyways, i'm curious to know is there a maximum word count for task 2? Is it okay to exceed 300 words? 1
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    @divyapatel6063منذ 3 سنوات Introduction thesis lines will change , as well as conclusion for different type of essays. So how to write those lines in that kinda essay
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    @imgodson7220منذ 3 سنوات Can we use personal opinions in essays like we,I ,our etc
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    @pskeditor2426منذ 3 سنوات Thanx for writing essay below discretion
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    @lovemakes5598منذ 3 سنوات I have a doubt ? .. sir you have used (commuters ) word for almost 3-4 times so repeating 3 times doesn't matter ?
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    @sarbjeetsingh5762منذ 3 سنوات You are giving wrong thesis statement becauses your question was about advantages and disadvantages which means plural (2:2 ratio question). How can we id="hidden14" class="buttons"> write only one advantage and disadvantage instead of plural merits and demerits. students may lack their bands in task achievement. Hope you will not mislead students. ....وسعت
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    @rajvirsingh935منذ 3 سنوات I was thinking that what if I don't make any eye contact or even at the examiner to keep my confidence high so that I would be able to speak better. id="hidden15" class="buttons"> Because this is not a conversation you also can suppose that you are talking to yourself and there is a robot asking questions and he is not there to judge you.
    IS IT GOING TO AFFECT MY BANDS IF I DO IT?
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    @manishadhikari5789منذ 3 سنوات But the higher number of word count that is seen on the given 9 band essay can be a problem right?
    Isn't this misleading? I am also appearing in ielts exam very soon so I want to be clear on this.
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    @shivamkaushal5099منذ 3 سنوات Sir if there are several merits and demerits of any topic rhen how can I write its thesis statement?
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    @manpreetkaur-fz3vuمنذ 3 سنوات Sir 4 is my academic ielts exam
    But m not getting even 6 bands
    Please help how can I embellish my reading
    I don't understand anything i
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    @gitabenpansuriya4449منذ 3 سنوات I have done all this mistake and got only 6
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    @rexorangecounty5769منذ 3 سنوات I’m sorry I couldn’t help it but what are you trying to do with your beard ?
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    @randomshortvideos3924منذ 3 سنوات Hello adrian sir I want see you ielts certificate to see how much band do you got.
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    @Nitinverma97منذ 3 سنوات Is it ok to write first disadvantages and then advantages???
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    @divyavarghese9921منذ 3 سنوات i really get confused whom to follow and whom to not
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    @minicomedyfamily4317منذ 3 سنوات Is the examiner examines the notes prepared by the students in task second. I'll be thankful for getting answer.
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    @navghuman4642منذ 3 سنوات Then what should be the thesis of agree disagree ???? Like this
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    @harshitagarwal7857منذ 3 سنوات i had ordered your writing feedback service but havent received any reply what so ever , this is not done no way to contact you guys very disappointed 1
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    @ZohairGotaandEditsمنذ 3 سنوات where are the conjunction i can’t find them
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    @amazingtv7847منذ 3 سنوات Can we use "in my opinion","from my perspective". and others
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    @randomshortvideos3924منذ 3 سنوات Sir can check speaking level where I stand.
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    @punjabi7797منذ 3 سنوات Sir please give me some tips for speaking 1
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    @phantomyash6649منذ 3 سنوات what about our opinion, do we need to mention like 'in my opinion' .!?
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    @baotran3740منذ 3 سنوات Your advice is extremely helpful sir but If everyone can see this, it would be commonly used by the candidates :(
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    @autumnleaves4553منذ 3 سنوات Watching this 15 days before my exam lol
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    @phantomknights392منذ 3 سنوات So basically the ielts is only tips and tricks, a way to get money from many peoples as you could.
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    @itzmanik2838منذ 3 سنوات First of all be careful about your own English. It is full of serious grammatical errors.